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The top five most-watched sports in the world!

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2021-04-16 607

회원님의 영작문

I think it is hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball that the top five most-watched sports in the world.
The reason is simple. Most people like the sports that are spectacular and tense. So team sports are more popular than an individual sport like marathon or figure skating. Also, spectator's cheering is big part of any sports. In case of soccer, the players will get energy from their fans voice. On the other hand, in case of marathon we can't cheer them continuously. Therefore I think the top five most-watched sports in the world are team games such as hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Sere, 
Sports play an important role in our lives. From the early childhood years where we take sports very seriously to the later years in life where we consider it as a hobby, a fitness ritual, and sometimes even a profession. People in different regions of the world have different favorite sports. The top -five most popular sports in the world are Soccer/Association Football, Cricket, Basketball, Field Hockey, and Tennis. My favorite sports are Volleyball and Badminton and I like to watch NBA Basketball Game on T.V. Be sport-minded.
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I think it is hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball that the top five most-watched sports in the world.
>> I think hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball are the top five most-watched sports in the world.
The reason is simple. 
>>The reason is simple. 
Most people like the sports that are spectacular and tense.
>> Most people like sports that are spectacular and tense.
So team sports are more popular than an individual sport like marathon or figure skating. 
>>So team sports are more popular than individual sports like a marathon or figure skating. 
Also, spectator's cheering is big part of any sports. 
>>Also, good cheering spectators play a big part in any sport.
In case of soccer, the players will get energy from their fans voice.
>>In the case of soccer, the players will get energy from their fan's voices.
 On the other hand, in case of marathon we can't cheer them continuously. 
>>On the other hand, in the case of a marathon, we can't cheer them continuously.
Therefore I think the top five most-watched sports in the world are team games such as hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball.
>>Therefore I think the top five most-watched sports in the world are team sports such as hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I think it is hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball that the top five most-watched sports in the world.
The reason is simple. Most people like the sports that are spectacular and tense. So team sports are more popular than an individual sport like marathon or figure skating. Also, spectator's cheering is big part of any sports. In case of soccer, the players will get energy from their fans voice. On the other hand, in case of marathon we can't cheer them continuously. Therefore I think the top five most-watched sports in the world are team games such as hockey, soccer, speed skating, American football, handball.
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