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What skill do you want to learn in the future and why?
- I'd like to learn baking. It is good way to express my appreciation with small gift. Hand-made cookies or snack or bakes by myself could impress people. It could be not only good refreshments for kids but also healthy foods.

Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare a job interview as below ?
\"I grew up in Pohang until finishing my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up degree in Multimidia communication engineering.
After I graduated from Seoul Women\'s university, I used to live in Toronto for 7 months to study English. While I lived there, I was interested in learning English.
So, after come to Korea, I joined semiconductor trading company to use English during my work. I have an experience over 5years for trading work. I hope there will be an opportunity to work with you.\"

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Hello, Ji Eun! It's nice to know that you are interested in baking to make people around you happy. Also, good luck on your job interview! 
-Faith-
What skill do you want to learn in the future and why?
>> CORRECT
- I'd like to learn baking. 
>> CORRECT
OR The skill that I want to acquire in the future is baking.
It is good way to express my appreciation with small gift. 
>> It is a good way to express my appreciation to others with small gifts. 
Hand-made cookies or snack or bakes by myself could impress people. 
>> Hand-made cookies or snacks that are baked by myself could impress people. 
It could be not only good refreshments for kids but also healthy foods.
>> It could not only be good refreshments for kids but are also healthy foods.
Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare a job interview as below ?
>> Could you give me a correction for my self introduction to prepare for a job interview as below?
"I grew up in Pohang until finishing my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up degree in Multimidia communication engineering.
>> "I grew up in Pohang until I finished my high school, and then I moved to Seoul when I was 20, and took up Multimedia Communication Engineering.
After I graduated from Seoul Women\'s university, I used to live in Toronto for 7 months to study English. 
>> After I graduated from Seoul Women's University, I went to Toronto and stayed there for seven months to study English. 
While I lived there, I was interested in learning English.
>> CORRECT
So, after come to Korea, I joined semiconductor trading company to use English during my work.
>> So, when I came back to Korea, I joined a semiconductor trading company to use English during my work.
 I have an experience over 5years for trading work. 
>> I have worked there for five years.
I hope there will be an opportunity to work with you.\"
>> I hope I will be given an opportunity to work with you."
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