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If you can have a big birthday party, how do you want it to be and who are you going to invite?

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If you can have a big birthday party, how do you want it to be and who are you going to invite?

I usally have a small birthday party with best friends.
Some friends give me a mobile gift.
If I have a big birthday party, I invitie a lot of friends.
And I am going to rent a big room something like guest house, our town has a big/small guest house each apartment.
A reseident of apartment can rent a guest house.
If they gather together one place, most of them don't know each other.
It is gonna to be a very fun party.

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Hi Monica! Yes, there are a lot advantages and disadvantages in having big birthday parties. It just differs based on what the person like. Some like it  big and some like it just to be intimate but I think both are okay just as long as the celebrant is happy. Yours sounds like a great party :)

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I usally have a small birthday party with best friends.
>> I usually have small birthday parties with my best friends. 

Some friends give me a mobile gift.
>> Some of them even gave me a mobile gift. 

If I have a big birthday party, I invitie a lot of friends.
>>If I will have a big birthday party, I have to invite a lot of friends.

And I am going to rent a big room something like guest house, our town has a big/small guest house each apartment.
>> I am going to rent a big room something like a guest house. Our town has a big and a small guest house on each apartment.

A reseident of apartment can rent a guest house.
>> A resident of the apartment can rent a guest house.

If they gather together one place, most of them don't know each other.
>>If they gather together one place, most of them will not know each other.

It is gonna to be a very fun party.
>> Although, it's still going to be a fun party. 
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