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There are many advantages of Korea, but if you choose a few, First, public transportation is well developed. The subway is nine lines, so you can use Wi-Fi anywhere. It's well marked so you don't get lost. And you can transfer to the bus with one card and move quickly anytime because there are many taxis. And the signal system is good, so you can use the road smoothly. And not only in the city but also in the provinces, there is public transportation in many places,

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Hi Steve! Wow. Korea is a very well established place to live in. You made me want to live there. I'm sure there are more exciting things in Korea especially the food. I can't wait to go there someday! :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

There are many advantages of Korea, but if you choose a few, 
>> There are many advantages in living in Korea but I can only choose a few. 

First, public transportation is well developed. 
>> CORRECT

The subway is nine lines, so you can use Wi-Fi anywhere. 
>> There are 9 subway stations and we can use Wi-Fi anywhere. 

It's well marked so you don't get lost. 
>>CORRECT

And you can transfer to the bus with one card and move quickly anytime because there are many taxis. 
>> And you can transfer to the bus with one card and travel quickly anytime because there are many taxis. 

And the signal system is good, so you can use the road smoothly. 
>> The signal is good as well so you can use your phone smoothly while on the road. 

And not only in the city but also in the provinces, there is public transportation in many places,
>> These are not only in the cities but in provinces as well. 
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