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What do you love most about your country? Explain your answer.

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I do love K-pop the most in my country.
In nowadays, lots of the people are loving our Korean's songs.
And I love K-pop as they love.
In the K-pop, I love hip-hiop the most.
I watched lots of TV programs like Show Me The Money.
If I listen to different country's hip-hop, it has only rapping.
But in Korea's hip-hop, there is also a songs.
So I love the K-pop ( Especialy hip-hop) the most in my country.

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Hi John! Wow. Korea is a very well established place to live in. You made me want to live there. I'm sure there are more exciting things in Korea especially the food. Like what you said it is very well known because of K-pop. I can't wait to go there someday! :) 

PS: Hip hop songs are different from Pop songs. Although there are some Pop songs that have rap verses in it :)

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I do love K-pop the most in my country.
>> I love K-pop the most in my country. 

In nowadays, lots of the people are loving our Korean's songs.
>> Nowadays, lots of people around the world are loving Korean songs. 

And I love K-pop as they love.
>> I love K-pop as much as they love it. 

In the K-pop, I love hip-hiop the most.
>> I love hip-hop the most. 

I watched lots of TV programs like Show Me The Money.
>> I watch lots of TV programs like "Show me the money" as well. 

If I listen to different country's hip-hop, it has only rapping.
>> If I listen to other country's hip-hop songs, most of them are raps songs. 

But in Korea's hip-hop, there is also a songs.
>> Korea's hip-hop has a mixture of different kinds of songs. 

So I love the K-pop ( Especialy hip-hop) the most in my country.
>> So I love hip-hop the most. 
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