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It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and grandparents are involved

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It is definitely helpful for children to live with whole family because all members would pay attention to them and give advice, care and educate them by various ways. The standard of family have been changed since my parents was born. These days, many people prefer to live alone because of the burden of house price, restriction of their activities and baby care. Thees are very common phenomenon in our society which have been accelerated the polarization of wealth. Although, there are many positive perspective living with whole family, the conflicts among the family members will be the main problem. I don't know which side I should stand if my wife and mother in law have different ideas about bringing up kids. In addition, Korea is really conservative country especially in terms of family relationship. Parents in law expect their daughter in law to do all stuff at home. They don't consider house chores as men's affairs. My country have strong belief about the role of men and women

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It is definitely helpful for children to live with whole family because all members would pay attention to them and give advice, care and educate them by various ways. 
>>> It is definitely helpful for children to live with their whole family because all members would pay attention to them and give advice, care and educate them in various ways. 
The standard of family have been changed since my parents was born.
>>> The standard of family has been changing since my parents was born.
 These days, many people prefer to live alone because of the burden of house price, restriction of their activities and baby care.
>>>  These days, many people prefer to live alone because of the burden of the house price, restrictions of their activities and baby care.
 Thees are very common phenomenon in our society which have been accelerated the polarization of wealth. 
>>> These has been a very common phenomenon in our society which have been accelerated the polarization of wealth. 
Although, there are many positive perspective living with the whole family, conflicts among the family members will be the main problem. 
>>> CORRECT
I don't know which side I should stand if my wife and mother in law have different ideas about bringing up kids. In addition, Korea is really conservative country especially in terms of family relationship. 
>>> I don't know which side I should stand if my wife and mother-in-law have different ideas about bringing up kids. 
In addition, Korea is really conservative country especially in terms of family relationship. 
>>> In addition, Korea is really a conservative country especially in terms of family relationship. 
Parents in law expect their daughter in law to do all stuff at home. 
>>> Parents-in-law expect their daughter-in-law to do all the stuff at home. 
They don't consider house chores as men's affairs.
>>> CORRECT
My country have strong belief about the role of men and women.
>>>My country has a strong belief about the role of men and women.
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