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Q:Why is self-defense a must for people especially kids nowadays?
A:We have to protact our self.
First, if we don't protact our self, then our body will hurt.
Second, if we don't protact our self, and if someone is going to hurt me then I can't do anything with out call to police.
Last, if we don't no how to protact our self, then we can't protact our self when there is something that can hurt us.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: Why is self-defense a must for people especially kids nowadays?

A: We have to protact our self.
>>> Self-defense is a must to kids these days because we [kids ] have to protect ourselves.
 
First, if we don't protact our self, then our body will hurt.
>>> First, if we don't protect our self then our body will get hurt. 

Second, if we don't protact our self, and if someone is going to hurt me then I can't do anything with out call to police.
>>> Second, if we don't protect ourselves, then if someone is going to hurt us we can't do anything but call the police.

Last, if we don't no how to protact our self, then we can't protact our self when there is something that can hurt us.
>>> Lastly, if we don't know how to do self-defense then we can't protect ourselves when there's someone that might hurt us. 
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