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my hometown is in Seoul. Seoul is Korea's capital. So there are many places to visit in Seoul. My favorite place in Seoul, is fennec store. fennec is wallet and bag store. I like fennec wallet. So i bought a fennec wallet. and also i like lotte world. lotte world is my favorite amusement park. So i really like Seoul.

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Hi, Hannah!
Thanks for telling me about your hometown. ^^

- T. Rina

1. my hometown is in Seoul. 
>> My hometown is Seoul.

2. Seoul is Korea's capital. 
>> CORRECT!

3. So there are many places to visit in Seoul. 
>> CORRECT!

4. My favorite place in Seoul, is fennec store. 
>> My favorite place in Seoul is Fennec Store.

5. fennec is wallet and bag store. 
>> Fennec is a wallet and bag store.

6. I like fennec wallet So i bought a fennec wallet. 
>> I like Fennec wallets, so I bought one.

7. And also i like lotte world. lotte world is my favorite amusement park. 
>> And I also like Lotte World. It is my favorite amusement park.

8. So i really like Seoul.
>> CORRECT!
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