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WRITING TASK: What kind of diet would you recommend to your friend? Why?
I recommend cutting flour diet such as bread, noodles, snacks and so on. Flour is not only harmful for our health but also makes our body fat. There are many foods which are made from flour. For example, hamburgers, pizza, bread, noodles.. which have high calories. These foods have much sugar and people are poisoned easily. That's the reason we should cut flour foods for our health and diet.

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Hi, Ji Eun! I am so glad you recommended this kind of diet. It's really informative. See you! -Faith-
WRITING TASK: What kind of diet would you recommend to your friend? Why?
>> CORRECT
I recommend cutting flour diet such as bread, noodles, snacks and so on. 
>> I recommend cutting out flour diet such as bread, noodles, snacks and so on. 
Flour is not only harmful for our health but also makes our body fat. 
>> CORRECT
OR Flour is not only harmful for our health but also makes us gain weight.
There are many foods which are made from flour. 
>> There are many foods which are made from flour. 
For example, hamburgers, pizza, bread, noodles.. which have high calories. 
>> For example, hamburgers, pizza, bread, and noodles, which have high calories. 
These foods have much sugar and people are poisoned easily. 
>> CORRECT
OR These foods are high in sugar and people are poisoned easily. 
That's the reason we should cut flour foods for our health and diet.
>> Those are the reasons why we should cut out flour foods/recipes for our health and diet.
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