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Giving out personal information is very dangerous and if it is on the internet, it's more dangerous.
Because you can't know his face on the internet and if you saw that, you can be sure it's real.
So they can deceive you and when you know that you were deceived, you can't find him.
So giving personal information on internet is very danderous.

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Hello, Jun! I'm glad that you answered the test. Be careful of your spelling words next time. I'm hoping to see you later in our class. Have a good day! :)
- Teacher Sophia

Giving out personal information is very dangerous and if it is on the internet, it's more dangerous.
>> Correct
Because you can't know his face on the internet and if you saw that, you can be sure it's real.
>> Because you wouldn't see his face. Also, If we saw his face, we can't b sure if it's real.
So they can deceive you and when you know that you were deceived, you can't find him.
>> So, they can deceive you and by the time that you realized that you were deceived, it's hard to contact him anymore.
So giving personal information on internet is very danderous.
>> That's why giving personal information on the internet is very dangerous.
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