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How can we minimize bullying?

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How can we minimize bullying?
We can minmize bullying with lots of ways.
We can show bullying prevention education programs to students.
In that way, we can prevent lots of bullyings.
And if we see any kinds of bullying, we can stop it.
We can stop it by ourselves, and also we can ask for help to parents or teacher.
We don't have to get involved to bullying, we can ask for help to adults.
We can minimize bullying with lots of ways loke these.
If we see bullying, we have to stop it.

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Hi John! Bullying has been a major problem all over the world. Not only for kids but with adults as well. It affects us, not only physically, but mentally and emotionally as well. Some people are actually not taking this seriously. This has to be put on stop now. Your ideas are good! I wish that everyone would have the same thinking like you :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

We can minmize bullying with lots of ways.
>> We can minimize bullying with a lot of ways. 

We can show bullying prevention education programs to students.
>> CORRECT

In that way, we can prevent lots of bullyings.
>> In that way, we can prevent bullying.

And if we see any kinds of bullying, we can stop it.
>>And if we see an act of bullying, we should stop it. 

We can stop it by ourselves, and also we can ask for help to parents or teacher.
>> We can stop it by ourselves, and also we can ask for help from our parents or teachers.

We don't have to get involved to bullying, we can ask for help to adults.
>> CORRECT

We can minimize bullying with lots of ways loke these.
>> We can minimize bullying with lots of ways like these.

If we see bullying, we have to stop it.
>>CORRECT
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