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If you can have one thing forever, what would it be and why?

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If i can have one thing forever, I want to get smart phone. smart phone is very important in my life. whenever I went to somewhere, I always take smart phone. It helps me kill the time. so If the distance is so long, smart phone helps me release my stress about distance. also you can't talk in outside without smart phone. that's why I pick smart phone.

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Hi Tobby! We all have something that we need all the time. Sometimes, it has a sentimental value to us that's why it's hard to let go. And there are some that are just very useful to us. Either way, we can't live without it because of the importance. It teaches us how to value things very much. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

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If i can have one thing forever, I want to get smart phone.
>> If I can have something forever, it would be a smart phone. 

smart phone is very important in my life. 
>> Smart phones are very important to our lives. 

whenever I went to somewhere, I always take smart phone. 
>> Whenever I go somewhere, I always have my smartphone with me. 

It helps me kill the time. 
>> It helps me kill time. 

so If the distance is so long, smart phone helps me release my stress about distance. 
>> If I'm going on a long distance trip, my smart phone helps me release my stress about the distance. 

also you can't talk in outside without smart phone. 
>> You can also talk to other people when your outside using this. 

that's why I pick smart phone.
>> This is why I would pick my smartphone. 
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