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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I agree plant trees in the town area is more important than build housing.
some people think that construction housing is more important.
however, in my opinion, people should plant trees in the open space in town, considering their healthy life and fresh air environment .
it goes without saying that people should make a priority to plant trees
in conclusion, it is not a selection but a necessity.
so i agree with it

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Hi there Louis~! ^^ Happy Friday to the both us. Thanks for doing your essay! Enjoy the rest of  the day and have a great weekend! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree plant trees in the town area is more important than build housing.
>>> I agree that planting trees in town areas is more important than building houses.
some people think that construction housing is more important.
>>> Some people think that house construction is more important.
however, in my opinion, people should plant trees in the open space in town, considering their healthy life and fresh air environment .
>>> However, in my opinion, people should plant trees in open spaces in town, considering their healthy life and fresh air environment. 
it goes without saying that people should make a priority to plant trees
in conclusion, it is not a selection but a necessity.
>>> It goes without saying that people should prioritize planting trees
in conclusion, it is not our choice but a necessity.

so i agree with it
>>> So, I agree with it. 
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