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Q:Do you like Korea to have a better relationship with Japan?
A:I like Korea to have a better relationship with Japan.
First, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can exchange with Japan.
Second, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get a apology from Japan.
Last, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get Japan's things or technology.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: Do you like Korea to have a better relationship with Japan?

A: I like Korea to have a better relationship with Japan.
>>> CORRECT

First, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can exchange with Japan.
>>> First, if Korea has a better relationship with Japan then Korea can exchange with Japan easily.

Second, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get a apology from Japan.
>>> Second, if Korea has a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get an apology from Japan for what happened in the past.

Last, if Korea have a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get Japan's things or technology.
>>> Last, if Korea has a better relationship with Japan then Korea can get or use Japan's technology.

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