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Q:Describe the traditional clothes in South Korea.
A:South Korea's traditional clothes are called Hanbok.
It has many colors mostly in arm and most of people wear it when it's new year or thanksgiving day.
Next, there are men's and women's, there are pant in men's and, there are red or pink color of dress in women's.
Last, it covers all of arms and legs and, almost of Hanbok has no patterns in the clothes and it is not soft.

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Q: Describe the traditional clothes in South Korea.

A: South Korea's traditional clothes are called Hanbok.
>>> CORRECT

It has many colors mostly in arm and most of people wear it when it's new year or thanksgiving day. 
>>> It has many colors mostly in the arm and most people wear it when it's New Year or Thanksgiving Day.

Next, there are men's and women's, there are pant in men's and, there are red or pink color of dress in women's.
>>> Next, there is a hanbok for men and for women, there are pants for men's hanbok and, red or pink are the most colors of the dress in women's hanbok.

Last, it covers all of arms and legs and, almost of Hanbok has no patterns in the clothes and it is not soft.
>>> Last, it covers all of the arms and legs. In addition, almost all Hanbok has no patterns and it is not soft.
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