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I think that almost children leave their family or parents at more than 20 years old.

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There are several reasons to leave family. Going to a university or work place in other province or having own new family by wedding. And another reason is to be independent when a person become an adult. But these days in Korea, there is a phenomenon that married son or daughtor get back to their parent's home. That is why the cost of house is too much expensive and they need someone who can take care of their children.

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I think that almost children leave their family or parents at more than 20 years old.
>> I think that most children leave their family or parents at about 20 years old or older.

There are several reasons to leave family.
>> There are several reasons for leaving family.

Going to a university or work place in other province or having own new family by wedding.
>> Going to a university or a workplace in the province or starting a family of their own after the wedding.

And another reason is to be independent when a person become an adult.
>> And another reason is to be independent when a person becomes an adult.

But these days in Korea, there is a phenomenon that married son or daughtor get back to their parent's home.
>> But these days in Korea, there is a phenomenon that married sons or daughters get back to their parents' home.

That is why the cost of house is too much expensive and they need someone who can take care of their children.
>> It is because the cost of housing is too much expensive and they need someone who can take care of their children.
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