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What’s a dysfunctional family? What are some Characteristics Of Dysfunctional Families?

작성자: 김*연
2021-04-27 860

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I think a dysfunctional family is a family that have unhealthy relationship between parents and their children or between each members of them. I think there are many characteristics of Dysfunctional Families. Representative characteristic of them is parent's abnormal obsession to their children. The obsession could be educational desire or desire that parents want their children to make successful life. This kind of characteristics come from that parents think their children as their belongings. They think they have the right to make their children what they want to do. Otherwise, parent's negligence could be cause of making dysfunctional family. Whatever is cause of making dysfunctional family, if someone realizes that their family has a problem and it seems it won't be resolved, leaving out of the house could be wise choice.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Solyna! ^^
Thank you so much for doing your homework.
Enjoy your night! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

I think a dysfunctional family is a family that have unhealthy relationship between parents and their children or between each members of them.
>> I think a dysfunctional family is a family that has an unhealthy relationship between the parents and their children or between each members.

I think there are many characteristics of Dysfunctional Families.
>> CORRECT!

Representative characteristic of them is parent's abnormal obsession to their children.
>> A representative characteristic of them is parents' abnormal obsession with their children.
 
The obsession could be educational desire or desire that parents want their children to make successful life. 
>> The obsession could be an educational desire or desire that parents want their children to have a successful life. 

This kind of characteristics come from that parents think their children as their belongings. 
>> This kind of character comes from parents who think of their children as their belongings. 

They think they have the right to make their children what they want to do. 
>> They think they have the right to make their children do what they want them to. 

Otherwise, parent's negligence could be cause of making dysfunctional family. 
>> Otherwise, the parents' negligence could be the cause of making the family dysfunctional.

Whatever is cause of making dysfunctional family, if someone realizes that their family has a problem and it seems it won't be resolved, leaving out of the house could be wise choice.
>> Whatever the cause of making a dysfunctional family is if someone realizes that their family has a problem and it seems like it's unresolvable, leaving home could be a wise choice.
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