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Q:What school policy do you hate as a student?
A:I don't hate any policy of school.
First, school policy is made because students must not do it and I don't do anything that is include in the school policy.
Second, I am not that vital in school so I don't do many things in school so I don't break the school policy.
Last, I don't do anything that will damage someone so I can't break the school policy.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: What school policy do you hate as a student?

A: I don't hate any policy of school.
>>> I don't hate any policy in school.

First, school policy is made because students must not do it and I don't do anything that is include in the school policy.
>>> First, a school policy is made for students to follow and I don't do the policies included in it because I know it's bad. 

Second, I am not that vital in school so I don't do many things in school so I don't break the school policy.
>>> CORRECT
OR: Second, I am not that vital in school so I don't do a lot of things so I don't break school policies.

Last, I don't do anything that will damage someone so I can't break the school policy. 
>>> CORRECT
OR: Last, I don't do anything that will damage someone else so I can't break the school policies. 

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