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What\'s the best advice from your parents?

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Well,if my memory serves me right, it was in 2010 when I was thinking about my future with my husband, because my boy friend was a pastor at that time I concerned about it. His salary was too low and I didn't prepare as a wife of pastor. But, my dad told that he is proud of me and support me forever. So I was able to decide wedding with my boy friend with a confidence. Now, he has quit the job and he is working with another carrier I find out that my dad was right and I am satisfied of him than before.

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Hi Jane!

They say that parents know best. I think this adage is true to you. Parents have instincts like no other and if we just listen to them, more often than not or even most of the time, we can stay out of trouble.

You made a good decision to heed your father's advice, he must be very happy and proud of you.

Thanks for this composition! See you next week!

-T. Donna =)

Well,if my memory serves me right, it was in 2010 when I was thinking about my future with my husband, because my boy friend was a pastor at that time I concerned about it. 
>> Well, if my memory serves me right, it was in 2010 when I was thinking about my future with my husband, because as my boy friend at that time, he was a pastor and I was concerned about it. 

His salary was too low and I didn't prepare as a wife of pastor. 
>> His salary was too low and I wasn't prepared to be a wife of a pastor. 

But, my dad told that he is proud of me and support me forever. 
>> Correct!

So I was able to decide wedding with my boy friend with a confidence. 
>> So I decided to wed with my boyfriend with confidence.

Now, he has quit the job and he is working with another carrier I find out that my dad was right and I am satisfied of him than before.
>>  Now, he has quit the job and he is working with another carrier. I found out that my dad was right and I am more satisfied of him than before.
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