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I studied English to transfer to a university in 2016. and I remember studying really hard at that time. At that time, I studied at an academy for a year to go to another university. At that time, I studied at an academy for a year to go to another university. That was the hardest time of my life to study. Although I couldn't go to a very good university, my parents buying me a good laptop because I succeeded in transferring to college.

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Hi Steve! It's actually nice to treat yourself sometimes for the efforts that you do on something. A pat on the shoulder makes us appreciate ourselves. :) It motivates us more to do great things. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I studied English to transfer to a university in 2016. and I remember studying really hard at that time. 
>> I studied English to transfer to a university in 201 and I remember studying really hard at that time. 

At that time, I studied at an academy for a year to go to another university. 
>> At that time, I studied at an academy for a year to go to another university. 

At that time, I studied at an academy for a year to go to another university. 
>> REDUNDANT SENTENCE. 

That was the hardest time of my life to study. 
>> That was the hardest time of my life while studying. 

Although I couldn't go to a very good university, my parents buying me a good laptop because I succeeded in transferring to college.
>> Despite me not entering a very good university, my parents still bought me a laptop because I succeeded in transferring to college.

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