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Tell me about one of the recent business trips you took. Where did you go and who did you go with? H

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i'm hardly ever go to business trip.
because my work position is a most in office work.

i think i went to business trip just one.
i went to JEJUDO with my colleague at work and musical actors. there are tour performance so i stay in 1 week.

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Tell me about one of the recent business trips you took. Where did you go and who did you go with? 

i'm hardly ever go to business trip.
because my work position is a most in office work.
>> I hardly ever go on a business trip because my occupation is office worker, which means that I work mostly in the office.

i think i went to business trip just one.
>> But I think I went on a business trip just one time.

i went to JEJUDO with my colleague at work and musical actors. 
>> I went to Jejudo with my colleague and musical actors. 

there are tour performance so i stay in 1 week.
>> There was a performance tour so we stayed in the city for 1 week.

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