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What part of Korean history do you hate the most?

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I like to most korean history. because i studed korean history, i think history is a so precious.

but all of the history is a keep the tragedy.
i think korean tragedy is a japanese colonial era.
because the korean people of that era suffered from japan and some korean peoples are still suffering.

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Here's your second composition, Soo Ji!

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             What part of Korean history do you hate the most?
I like to most korean history. because i studed korean history
>> I generally like Korean history because I studied it.

, i think history is a so precious.
>> I think history is so precious.

but all of the history is a keep the tragedy.
>> [I'm not sure I understand this sentence.]

i think korean tragedy is a japanese colonial era.
because the korean people of that era suffered from japan and some korean peoples are still suffering.
>> I personally believe that the most tragic part is the Japanese colonial era because the Korean people of that period suffered at the hands of Japan and some Korean people are still suffering.

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