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What\'s the best thing about musicals?

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i think musical is a fantastic culture.
korea musical industry is very active enough to be ranked in the top four in the world.
Musical are not boring because we can watch singing, dance, and acting at the same time.

+ This is the video of HONG Kwang-ho from 'Miss Saigon' !

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dnwl7l1rkuw

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Hi Soo Ji!

I appreciate the link you've shared. I'm definitely going to watch it! Here's your edited composition.
See you later!

Cheers,
Jean~~




                       What\'s the best thing about musicals?

i think musical is a fantastic culture.
>> I think musicals are a fantastic element of culture.

korea musical industry is very active enough to be ranked in the top four in the world.
>> The Korean musical industry is active enough to be ranked in the top four in the world.

Musical are not boring because we can watch singing, dance, and acting at the same time.
>> Musicals are not boring because we can watch singing, dancing, and acting at the same time.

+ This is the video of HONG Kwang-ho from 'Miss Saigon' !
>> Here's a link to a video of HONG Kwang-ho from 'Miss Saigon.
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