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If you can have your own restaurant, what food do you want to serve there?

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If I can have my own restaruant, I want to serve a lot of kinds of sea foods.
Korea has three seas, and so here is a lot of kinds of sea foods.
And a lot of Koreans love the foods that is made from sea creatures.
And in a lot of sea foods, I like raw fishes.
But there are just few restauraunts that good at making raw fishes.
So I want to serve a lot of kinds sea foods especialy raw fishes, if I can have my own restauraunts.

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Hi John! That sounds nice! I love those kinds of food as well. You made me hungry while reading your answer. Hahahaha! 

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If I can have my own restaruant, I want to serve a lot of kinds of sea foods.
>> If I can have my own restaurant, I want to serve different kind of sea food. 

Korea has three seas, and so here is a lot of kinds of sea foods.
>> Korea has three seas so there are a lot of sea foods here. 

And a lot of Koreans love the foods that is made from sea creatures.
>> Korean also love sea food. 

And in a lot of sea foods, I like raw fishes.
>>> I like raw fish the most when it comes to sea food. 

But there are just few restauraunts that good at making raw fishes.
>> But only a few restaurants here serve that. 

So I want to serve a lot of kinds sea foods especialy raw fishes, if I can have my own restauraunts.
>> So I want to serve seafood, most especially raw fish, if I can have my own restaurant. 
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