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Dear Don,

I think, Diet is very difficult process. if someone want to lose weight, never eat when it is evening and night time.
I had a little experience for diet and losing weight.
Two or three years ago, I decreased my weight about 10 kg for three weeks. In my remember, I didn't eat dinner any more at the time.
When I was beginning, I thought it was very hungry and It was very difficult time for a day. but after one week, it was better than beginning. I think, my stomach size decreased, so I didn't feel hungry than before.
My wife warry about my health situation, because I lose my weight rapidly.
Now, my wife want to lose her's weight, because my nephew will get merried this month.
After wedding, it will take a picture with all familly. My wife want good fit with her's clothes.
In my case, never mind for my clothes. I gave up my fit. I want to enjoy a delicious food!!

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Hi Andrew!

Sorry I checked your composition just now. I was too busy so now I'm checking it. See you later ^^

T. DON

Dear Don,

I think, Diet is very difficult process. if someone want to lose weight, never eat when it is evening and night time.
>> I think, having a diet is a very difficult process. If someone want to lose weight, never eat in the evening or at night time.

I had a little experience for diet and losing weight.
>> I had a little experience in dieting and losing weight.

Two or three years ago, I decreased my weight about 10 kg for three weeks. In my remember, I didn't eat dinner any more at the time.
>> Two or three years ago, I decreased (or lost) my weight at about 10 kg for three weeks. From what I remember, I didn't have dinner (or I didn't eat something for dinner) at the time.

When I was beginning, I thought it was very hungry and It was very difficult time for a day. but after one week, it was better than beginning. I think, my stomach size decreased, so I didn't feel hungry than before.
>> When I was starting my diet, I thought I was very hungry and It was very difficult day for me not to eat but after one week, it was better and I was starting to get used to it. I think my stomach size decreased, so I didn't feel hungry than before.

My wife warry about my health situation, because I lose my weight rapidly.
>> My wife worries about my health situation, because I lose my weight rapidly.

Now, my wife want to lose her's weight, because my nephew will get merried this month.
>> Now, my wife wants to lose her weight, because my nephew will get married this month.

After wedding, it will take a picture with all familly. My wife want good fit with her's clothes.
>> After the wedding, she will take a picture with all the famillies. My wife wants her clothes to be perfect and fit for her. 

In my case, never mind for my clothes. I gave up my fit. I want to enjoy a delicious food!!
>> In my case, I don't mind on the clothes that I am wearing. I gave up on being fit. I want to enjoy delicious food!! ( kkkk)
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