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If you can have your own restaurant, what food do you want to serve there?

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I\'m not good at cooking. but my sister is good at it. and my favorite food which she made is kimchi stew. I love it. so If I have own restaurant, I employ my sister and let her make kimchi stew and Stir-fried Vienna Sausages and Vegetables. I think most of client will be happy after they eat food she made. I am confident my sister's cooking level.

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Hi Tobby! That sounds nice! I love those kinds of food as well. You made me hungry while reading your answer. Hahahaha! 

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I\'m not good at cooking. but my sister is good at it. 
>> I'm not good in cooking but my sister is. 

and my favorite food which she made is kimchi stew. 
>>My favorite food that she makes is kimchi stew. 

I love it. so If I have own restaurant, I employ my sister and let her make kimchi stew and Stir-fried Vienna Sausages and Vegetables. 
>> I love it so if I can have my own restaurant, I will hire my sister and let her make kimchi stew, stir fried Vienna sausages and vegetables. 

I think most of client will be happy after they eat food she made.
>> I think most clients would be happy if they try my sister's cooking. 

 I am confident my sister's cooking level.
>> I am confident with my sister's cooking skills. 

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