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Truly good appearance

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Thinking to be happy myself and always staying smile is to be the most beautiful.
I think that truly good appearance is not outside of person, but inside.
Namely, It is important to develop my inner life.
Therefore, I've been trying to live with pleasure.
In addition, I wear a kind of simple and tidy clothes.

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Hi Eun Ha!
I would like to reiterate the importance of word choice.
You did well with patterns.
However, I would like you to familiarize yourself with the expressions commonly used in this situation.
We can discuss more in the class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Thinking to be happy myself and always staying smile is to be the most beautiful.
>> Thinking of how to make myself happy and always smiling would make me the most beautiful version of myself. 
I think that truly good appearance is not outside of person, but inside.
>> I think that truly good appearance can not be seen on the outside but on the inside.
Namely, It is important to develop my inner life.
>> To be more specific, it is important to develop my inner self.
Therefore, I've been trying to live with pleasure.
>> Correct
In addition, I wear a kind of simple and tidy clothes.
>> In addition, I wear simple and tidy clothes.
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