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Is it about time that Korea tries to open its pharmaceutical industry and make it global? Explain.

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In the global disaster situation, this moment is chance to Korea to open its pharmaceutical industry.
Actually, our country is developed related to medical including our health insurance but is lagging on the pharmaceutical industry.
Many countries, even China that is our neighbor nation, developed vaccine in case of covid-19 but our local pharmaceutical companies couldn¡¯t develop it.
But recently, our local pharmaceutical company developed Covid 19¡¯s self-testing kits and approved to export it.
In the result, several European countries are using these kits that is developed by our country.
It is a rare thing that other countries import our drugs.
Therefore, we should think it is chance for our country and make our local pharmaceutical companies globally.

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Is it about time that Korea tries to open its pharmaceutical industry and make it global? Explain.


In the global disaster situation, this moment is chance to Korea to open its pharmaceutical industry.
>>> In the global disaster situation, this moment is a chance for Korea to open its pharmaceutical industry.

Actually, our country is developed related to medical including our health insurance but is lagging on the pharmaceutical industry.
>>> Actually, our country is developed when it comes to the medical field including our health insurance but is lagging on the pharmaceutical industry.

Many countries, even China that is our neighbor nation, developed vaccine in case of covid-19 but our local pharmaceutical companies couldn¡¯t develop it.
>>> Many countries have developed vaccines for covid-19, even our neighboring country China,  but our local pharmaceutical companies couldn¡¯t develop it.

But recently, our local pharmaceutical company developed Covid 19¡¯s self-testing kits and approved to export it.
>>> But recently, one of our local pharmaceutical companies developed the COVID 19¡¯s self-testing kits and was approved to export them.

In the result, several European countries are using these kits that is developed by our country.
>>> As the result, several European countries are using these kits that are locally developed in our country.

It is a rare thing that other countries import our drugs.
>>> CORRECT

Therefore, we should think it is chance for our country and make our local pharmaceutical companies globally.
>>> Therefore, we should think it is a chance for our country to make our local pharmaceutical companies globally.
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