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Q:Do you think hiking is only for old people?
A:I don't think it's only for old people.
First, young people and not old people can love hiking so it's not only for old people.
Second, hiking is good at our health so anyone can hike for their health or their fun.
Last, many people love hiking and they can hike anytime when they have free time so it's not only for old people.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



Q: Do you think hiking is only for old people?

A: I don't think it's only for old people.
>>> CORRECT

First, young people and not old people can love hiking so it's not only for old people.
>>> First, young people can also love hiking so I personally think it's not only for old people. 

Second, hiking is good at our health so anyone can hike for their health or their fun.
>>> Second, hiking is good for our health so anyone can hike for their health or for fun.

Last, many people love hiking and they can hike anytime when they have free time so it's not only for old people.
>>> Lastly, many people love hiking and they can do it anytime when they have free time.  So it's not only for old people, anybody either young or old can hike. 

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