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What do you think was the most important invention in history?

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I think antibiotics was the most important invention in this history.
Before invention of antibiotics, there were lots of people that died because of just a cold.
But Sir Alexander Fleming invented antibiotics, and it made us very strong at the damages of cold.
So lots of people didn't died because of cold anymore.
If Fleming didn't found antibiotics, many people may died because of cold.
So I think antibiotics is the most important invention in this history.

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Hi John! All inventions serve a purpose to everyone. They are made to make our lives more convenient although there are some that stand out to us the most. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

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I think antibiotics was the most important invention in this history.
>>I think antibiotics are the most important inventions in history. 

Before invention of antibiotics, there were lots of people that died because of just a cold.
>> Before the invention of antibiotics, there were lots of people who died because of the common cold. 

But Sir Alexander Fleming invented antibiotics, and it made us very strong at the damages of cold.
>> Thanks to Alexander Fleming for inventing antibiotics, we now have something to use to kill viruses and bacteria like this. 

So lots of people didn't died because of cold anymore.
>> Not a lot of people die because of the common cold anymore. 

If Fleming didn't found antibiotics, many people may died because of cold.
>>If Fleming didn't discover antibiotics, many people would still be dying. 

So I think antibiotics is the most important invention in this history.
>>So I think antibiotics are the most important invention in history.

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