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yes i can. I can play without a smart phone. I can play with my friends, play the piano, and practice some math homework.
and also There is a lot of board games in my house. SO i can leave without of smart phone.

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Hello Hanah,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


yes i can. I can play without a smart phone. 
>>> Yes, I can play without using my smartphone. 

I can play with my friends, play the piano, and practice some math homework.
>>> I can play with my friends, play the piano, and practice how to solve my math homework. 

and also There is a lot of board games in my house. SO i can leave without of smart phone.
>>> I also have a lot of board games in the house so I can live without using my smartphone. 

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