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What do you think was the most important invention in history?

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I think penicillin is the greatest invention. Penicillin was the first antibiotic in mankind, increasing the life of humans. Before penicillin, many people died young from infectious diseases. Penicillin has made it easy to treat most diseases. If you think about Covid-19 now, you'll realize how important this vaccine is.

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Hi Steve! All inventions serve a purpose to everyone. They are made to make our lives more convenient although there are some that stand out to us the most. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

PS: You're writing skills are getting better day by day. Good job! ^^

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I think penicillin is the greatest invention. 
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Penicillin was the first antibiotic in mankind, increasing the life of humans. 
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Before penicillin, many people died young from infectious diseases. 
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Penicillin has made it easy to treat most diseases. 
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If you think about Covid-19 now, you'll realize how important this vaccine is.
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