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WRITING TASK: Is aging more difficult for men or women? Why?
I think aging is more difficult for men. Because usually men more like alcohol and smoking than women. Many men who like alcohol or smoking started it when they were young. If they would not stop it after they get elders, it might affect to their health badly. Also, women are more sensitive about skin aging and weight than men. Women are trying to keep nice skin and bodies.

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Wow! I like your thoughts about this question, Ji Eun! You clearly explained your reason to me. Good job! -Faith-
WRITING TASK: Is aging more difficult for men or women? Why?
>> CORRECT
I think aging is more difficult for men. 
>> CORRECT
Because usually men more like alcohol and smoking than women. 
>> Because, usually men like alcohol and smoking more than women. 
Many men who like alcohol or smoking started it when they were young. 
>> Many men who like alcohol or smoking start doing it at a young age. 
If they would not stop it after they get elders, it might affect to their health badly. 
>> If they would not stop it as they get old, it might affect their health badly. 
Also, women are more sensitive about skin aging and weight than men.
>> CORRECT
OR Women are more self-conscious about skin imperfections than men.
 Women are trying to keep nice skin and bodies.
 >> Women try to keep nice skin and body shape.
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