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Is it necessary to go to a private school in you country? Why or why not?

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No, it isn't. It isn't necessary to go to a private school in Korea, my country.
Almost elementary, middle, and high school is made by gorverment.
But almost university is private school.
But in Korea, we can choose the way to go to university or not.

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Hi John! Education is the key to success so we really need to invest on it. We have 2 options on how to attain it. There are private and public schools. Sometimes it depends on your financial state whether which one are you going to avail. Regardless of so, it still depends on the person whether they are going to study well or not. Not only should we focus on what school to go to, but also give encouragement to the students. :) 

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No, it isn't. It isn't necessary to go to a private school in Korea, my country.
>> No it is not.  It's not necessary to go to a private school here in my country, Korea. 

Almost elementary, middle, and high school is made by gorverment.
>> Most elementary, middle school and high schools are made by the government. 

But almost university is private school.
>> Although, most universities are private. 

But in Korea, we can choose the way to go to university or not.
>> Despite that, we still have the chance to choose what university to go to. 
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