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What do you think was the most important invention in history?

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In history of korea, I think hangul which korean use word. but If you ask me about whole world, absolutely electricity. I don't just answer this since my major is electric engineering. if there doesn't electricity in the earth, we can't develop like this. electricity is one of them which are dangerous if they don't exist in the world.

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Hi Tobby! All inventions serve a purpose to everyone. They are made to make our lives more convenient although there are some that stand out to us the most. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

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In history of korea, I think hangul which korean use word. 
> In the history of Korea, I think Hangul is the most important invention. 

but If you ask me about whole world, absolutely electricity. 
>> But when it comes to the entire world, I think it would be electricity. 

I don't just answer this since my major is electric engineering. 
>> I am not saying this because my major is Electric Engineering. 

if there doesn't electricity in the earth, we can't develop like this. 
>> if there's no electricity on Earth, we wouldn't have developed. 

electricity is one of them which are dangerous if they don't exist in the world.
>> Electricity is one of the reasons why we have the life we have today. It wouldn't be the same without it. 
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