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Is it necessary to go to a private school in you country? Why or why not?

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well, I think it is necessary. there's a word in korea ±Ù¹¬ÀÚÈæ. this means if you close more black ink, you can be easier black. I think atmosphere of school is very important. if you enter public school, the possibility you meet bad student increase. so if I have a kid, I must enter my kid in private school, even their fee is more expensive than the other school.

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Hi Tobby! Education is the key to success so we really need to invest on it. We have 2 options on how to attain it. There are private and public schools. Sometimes it depends on your financial state whether which one are you going to avail. Regardless of so, it still depends on the person whether they are going to study well or not. Not only should we focus on what school to go to, but also give encouragement to the students. :) 

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well, I think it is necessary. 
>> CORRECT

there's a word in korea ±Ù¹¬ÀÚÈæ. 
>> There's a word in Korea, it is ±Ù¹¬ÀÚÈæ.

this means if you close more black ink, you can be easier black. 
>> This means, if you are close to black ink, then you can be get easily get black ink as well. 

I think atmosphere of school is very important. 
>> I think the atmosphere of a school is very important. 

 if you enter public school, the possibility you meet bad student increase. 
>> If you enter a public school, you can easily meet up with bad students. 

so if I have a kid, I must enter my kid in private school, even their fee is more expensive than the other school.
>>So when I have a kid, I must enter him/her to a private school even if it is more expensive.
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