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Is it necessary to go to a private school in you country? Why or why not?

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Is it necessary to go to a private school in you country? Why or why not?

our country has a private school for each city.
A private school is expensive than a public school.
That's why wealthy families 's children are entered there.
I think that a private school is not necessary.
It seems to be divided between the rich and poor for education.

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Hi Monica! Education is the key to success so we really need to invest on it. We have 2 options on how to attain it. There are private and public schools. Sometimes it depends on your financial state whether which one are you going to avail. Regardless of so, it still depends on the person whether they are going to study well or not. Not only should we focus on what school to go to, but also give encouragement to the students. :) 

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our country has a private school for each city.
>> Our country has private schools in each city. 

A private school is expensive than a public school.
>> Going to a private school is more expensive than going to a public school. 

That's why wealthy families 's children are entered there.
>> That's why wealthy families children go there. 

I think that a private school is not necessary.
>> I think that going to a private school is not necessary. 

It seems to be divided between the rich and poor for education.
>> It seems to divide the poor and rich people. 
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