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My parents raised me sincerely. My parents always gave me freedom. Friends of my age were not free. Because my friends' parents forced my friends to study or academy. But my parents let me do everything myself rather than force me. My parents asked me what I liked and told me to do what I wanted. And when my parents scolded me, they didn't hit me and made me realize that I did something wrong. So I think I prefer the way my parents did it.

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Hi Steve! We all undergone different childhoods because of our parents. Some may be good and some may not be as good. The way our parents raised us reflects on what kind of person we are today. Regardless of so, we should be thankful for their sacrifices. :) 

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My parents raised me sincerely. 
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My parents always gave me freedom. 
>> CORRECT

Friends of my age were not free. Because my friends' parents forced my friends to study or academy. 
>>>Friends of my age were not free because my friends' parents forced them to study or go to the academy. 

But my parents let me do everything myself rather than force me. 
>>CORRECT

My parents asked me what I liked and told me to do what I wanted. 
>> CORRECT

And when my parents scolded me, they didn't hit me and made me realize that I did something wrong. 
>> When my parents scolded me, they never hit me and made me realize that I did something wrong. 

So I think I prefer the way my parents did it.
>> CORRECT
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