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Q) Do you think women should only stay at home while men should only work for the family?

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No, absolutely not. Both men and women should be given the opportunity to do economic activity and social activity, and this is connected to basic freedom. Breaking gender stereotypes is a task for all of us.

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Good day, Laura!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, you really did great. :) Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Q) Do you think women should only stay at home while men should only work for the family?


A)
No, absolutely not. 
>> CORRECT!

Both men and women should be given the opportunity to do economic activity and social activity, and this is connected to basic freedom. 
>> CORRECT!

Breaking gender stereotypes is a task for all of us.
>> CORRECT!
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