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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for

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I fully agree with this idea. Teenagers are impulsive and they love speed, dangerous situation and sometimes lose their mind. There have been a lot of car accidents at night. Teenagers who didn't have a drive license brought their parents key and enjoyed driving at late night and was in a car accident involved death themselves and other people sometimes. Theses days, our government asked elderly to return their license and provide little money because their general ability are weaker so there are many chances to cause accident. The license system in my country should also be more strict because people can easily get license if they register driving institute and pay money. There are written and practice tests but people easily forget what they learnt when they are on the road. To guarantee drivers safety, we need to train them a lot and also encourage them to practice driving skill before they are on the road.

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! Thank you for doing your homework! Keep writing! Keep learning! Have a good one!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I fully agree with this idea.
>>> CORRECT
 Teenagers are impulsive and they love speed, dangerous situation and sometimes lose their mind. 
>>>  Teenagers are impulsive and they love speeding which leads to dangerous situation and sometimes lose their mind. 
There have been a lot of car accidents at night.
>>> CORRECT
 Teenagers who didn't have a drive license brought their parents key and enjoyed driving at late night and was in a car accident involved death themselves and other people sometimes.
>>>  Teenagers who don't have a driver's license get their parents key and enjoy driving late at night and could be involved in car accidents which lead to their death and other people sometimes.
 Theses days, our government asked elderly to return their license and provide little money because their general ability are weaker so there are many chances to cause accident. 
>>>  These days, our government asked the elderly to return their license and will be supported with a little amount of money because their general ability is weaker so there are many chances to cause accidents. 
The license system in my country should also be more strict because people can easily get license if they register driving institute and pay money. 
>>> The license system in my country should also be more strict because people can easily get license if they register in driving institute and pay money. 
There are written and practice tests but people easily forget what they learnt when they are on the road. 
>>> CORRECT
To guarantee drivers safety, we need to train them a lot and also encourage them to practice driving skill before they are on the road.
>>> To guarantee drivers' safety, we need to train them a lot and also encourage them to practice driving skills before they get on the road.
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