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How did your parents raise you?

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I was born in Bucheon city, where I am living, left down side of Seoul city.
But when I was 6 years old, I went to Philippines and I lived 2 years in there.
I could develope my English skill in there, and Philippines uses global age so I was one more grade than my Korea grade.
In Korea, we go to school from 8 to 19 years old (Korean age).
But I went to school starting from 7 years old (Korean age).
And I came back when I was 8 years old (Korean age), so I did first grade in elementary school for 2 years.
And now, I am the first grade of middle school.

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Hi John! We all undergone different childhoods because of our parents. Some may be good and some may not be as good. The way our parents raised us reflects on what kind of person we are today. Regardless of so, we should be thankful for their sacrifices. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I was born in Bucheon city, where I am living, left down side of Seoul city.
>> I was born and raised in Bucheon city which is the south of Seoul. 

But when I was 6 years old, I went to Philippines and I lived 2 years in there.
>> When I was 6 years old, I went to the Philippines and lived there for 2 years. 

I could develope my English skill in there, and Philippines uses global age so I was one more grade than my Korea grade.
>> I developed my English skills there and they used international ages so when I was there, I was 1 grade ahead. 

In Korea, we go to school from 8 to 19 years old (Korean age).
>> CORRECT. 

But I went to school starting from 7 years old (Korean age).
>> CORRECT

And I came back when I was 8 years old (Korean age), so I did first grade in elementary school for 2 years.
>> When I came back, UI was already 8 years old (Korean age), so I did first grade in elementary school twice. 

And now, I am the first grade of middle school.
>> And now, I am in first grade of middle school. 
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