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Personally, do you think people can really stop using plastic? Explain.

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Yes. I think that we can stop using plastic someday.
We have overcome many problems that we are having.
For example, because of the lack of oil and an air pollution, we developed electronic vehicles.
Until just a decade ago, we though it is impossible to develop electronic vehicles, but finally we made them.
Even though it takes long time, people have overcome their problems.
We haven¡¯t solved the COVID-19 virus yet, but people made Vaccine earlier than expected.
In case of plastic problems, many Korean companies are having an effort to reduce the use of them.
Recently in Korea, the trend is to remove the label of bottled water, and the wrapper is being replaced with paper.
If we try constantly, we can overcome the problem about plastic someday.

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Hello Cleo,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Personally, do you think people can really stop using plastic? Explain.

Yes. I think that we can stop using plastic someday.
>>> CORRECT 

We have overcome many problems that we are having.
>>> We have overcome many problems that we had in the past.

For example, because of the lack of oil and an air pollution, we developed electronic vehicles.
>>> For example, because of the lack of oil and air pollution, we developed electronic vehicles.

Until just a decade ago, we though it is impossible to develop electronic vehicles, but finally we made them.
>>> Until just a decade ago, we thought it is impossible to develop electronic vehicles, but finally, we made them.

Even though it takes long time, people have overcome their problems.
>>> Even though it took a long time, we were able to overcome our problems.

We haven¡¯t solved the COVID-19 virus yet, but people made Vaccine earlier than expected.
>>> We haven¡¯t solved the COVID-19 virus yet, but people made vaccines earlier than expected.

In case of plastic problems, many Korean companies are having an effort to reduce the use of them.
>>> In the case of the problem of plastics, a lot of Korean companies are giving an effort to reduce the use of them.

Recently in Korea, the trend is to remove the label of bottled water, and the wrapper is being replaced with paper.
>>> Recently in Korea, the new trend is to remove the label of bottled water, and are replaced with paper.

If we try constantly, we can overcome the problem about plastic someday.
>>> If we try constantly, we can overcome the problem of plastic someday.
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