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How did your parents raise you

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My parents raise me with a lot of attention. They let me to do want I want but they were strict in some points. They always taught me to be polite and be nice to other people. They keep supporting me and caring about me. I think I grown up in good circumstance.

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Hi Heidi! We all undergone different childhoods because of our parents. Some may be good and some may not be as good. The way our parents raised us reflects on what kind of person we are today. Regardless of so, we should be thankful for their sacrifices. :) 

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My parents raise me with a lot of attention. 
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They let me to do want I want but they were strict in some points. 
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They always taught me to be polite and be nice to other people. 
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They keep supporting me and caring about me. 
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I think I grown up in good circumstance.
>> I think I grew up in good circumstances. 
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