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Q:What should people do to save energy and help nature stop global warming?
A:People must turn off lights and faucets to save energy and people must use bicycle when they go outside in short time.
Frist, if we don't turn off lights and faucets when we don't use, then they will waste energy to release water and light.
Second, if people use cars when they go outside in short time, then the car exhaust so global warming will be worse then before.
Last, if people don't action this to things then global warming will be worse then before and they will waste energy and their money.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)


Q: What should people do to save energy and help nature stop global warming?

A: People must turn off lights and faucets to save energy and people must use bicycle when they go outside in short time.
>>> People must turn off lights and faucets to save energy and they must use the bicycle when they go outside for a short time.  

Frist, if we don't turn off lights and faucets when we don't use, then they will waste energy to release water and light.
>>> First, if we don't turn off the lights and faucets when we don't use them, then we are wasting energy.

Second, if people use cars when they go outside in short time, then the car exhaust so global warming will be worse then before.
>>> Second, if people use cars when they go outside in a short time, then carbon dioxide will increase so global warming will be worse than before.

Last, if people don't action this to things then global warming will be worse then before and they will waste energy and their money.
>>> Lastly, if people don't act on these problems then global warming will be worse than before and they will waste a lot of energy and money which will make our nature suffer. 
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