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What will you do if you experience discrimination when you visit a different country and why?

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If I experience discrimination whenI visited a different country, I will express my intention to person who did discrimination to me.
Everyone doesn't like being discriminated by someone.
The person who discriminated someone, will be very angry if he / she is discriminated by someone.
Now, its time of global.
We have to respect each other and we shouldn't have to discriminate someone because we are all human.
So if I experience discrimination whenI visited a different country, I will express my intention to person who did discrimination to me.

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Hi John! Discrimination is a very serious problem that a lot of people are facing. Mostly foreigners who visit other countries experience this the most. This should be put to a stop for the safety of everyone. Not only does it affect us emotionally, but mentally and physically as well. So when you see someone being discriminated, try to stand up for them so that this behavior won't be tolerated :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

If I experience discrimination whenI visited a different country, I will express my intention to person who did discrimination to me.
>>If I experience discrimination when I visit a different country, I will express my intention that person.

Everyone doesn't like being discriminated by someone.
>>Everyone doesn't want to be discriminated by someone. 

The person who discriminated someone, will be very angry if he / she is discriminated by someone.
>>People who discriminate someone will get angry when they get discriminated as well by other people. 

Now, its time of global.
>> Nowadays, it's different globally. 

We have to respect each other and we shouldn't have to discriminate someone because we are all human.
>> CORRECT

So if I experience discrimination whenI visited a different country, I will express my intention to person who did discrimination to me.
>> So if I experience discrimination when I visit a different country, I will express my intention that person.

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