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The best news is that an actress, Yoon Yeo-jeong, in my country received the Oscar award of Best Supporting Actress
I am proud her and I look up to her.
I was impressed by what she said at the ceremony place.
That was: "where were you, Brad Pitt, during filming¡°
I thought it was wise that she told him like that.

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Hi there, Ms. Eun Ha!
Thanks for sending your homework promptly. Here's your corrected composition. In fact, I'm a big fan of Yoon Yeo-Jeong, and probably watched all of her interviews, especially the ones in English, including her interview with the director of Parasite, Bong Joon Ho. Anyway, see you again next time.

Cheers, 
Jean~~



The best news is that an actress, Yoon Yeo-jeong, in my country received the Oscar award of Best Supporting Actress
I am proud her and I look up to her.
>> The best news I've heard so far is that an actress in my country named, Yoon Yeo-Jeong, received the Oscar award for Best Supporting Actress. 

I am proud her and I look up to her.
>> I am proud of her and I look up to her.

I was impressed by what she said at the ceremony place.
>> I was impressed by what she said during her award acceptance speech. 

That was: "where were you, Brad Pitt, during filming.¡°
>> correct 
>> [I love this part of her speech, too, but I found the part wherein she mentioned her kids way funnier.]

I thought it was wise that she told him like that.
>> I thought it was wise that she told him that. 
>> [Indeed, this is because Brad Pitt's production company produced their movie, Minari.]

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