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What is your best memory in school and why?

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I remember traveling to North Korea the most when I was in the third grade of middle school. Now south korea people can't go to North Korea because of the international situation, but when I was in middle school, The relationship with North Korea was very good. So South Koreans went on the most famous tours to Geumgang Mountain in North Korea. I talked with North Koreans, ate North Korean food, and watched North Korean performances there. The memory of that time was the most impressive.

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Hi Steve! We all have good memories in school that we can cherish for a life time. Some of them may not be as good as we expect it to be but it let us grow to the person we are today. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

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I remember traveling to North Korea the most when I was in the third grade of middle school. 
>>I remember traveling to North Korea when I was in the third grade of middle school the most 

Now south korea people can't go to North Korea because of the international situation, but when I was in middle school, 
>> Now, people from South Korea can't visit North Korea because of the situation is different now than before. 

The relationship with North Korea was very good. 
>> The relationship of both countries were good before. 

So South Koreans went on the most famous tours to Geumgang Mountain in North Korea. 
>> So South Korean go to the most famous tourist spots like the Geumgang Mountain in North Korea. 

I talked with North Koreans, ate North Korean food, and watched North Korean performances there.
>> CORRECT

 The memory of that time was the most impressive.
>> CORRECT
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