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What is your best memory in school and why?

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What is your best memory in school and why?

I have one thing the best momoery in school.
When I was high school, I performed a high school festival with our class' friends.
For the performance, we praticed every day after school.
We finished our performance sucessfully.
Acutally, I have an introverted personality, so I feed uncomfortable to perform in fornt of many pepple.
That's why I was trying to overcome it. And then it was a good experience for me this event.

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Hi Monica! We all have good memories in school that we can cherish for a life time. Some of them may not be as good as we expect it to be but it let us grow to the person we are today. Thanks for sharing yours :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I have one thing the best momoery in school.
>> I have one good memory in school.

When I was high school, I performed a high school festival with our class' friends.
>> When I was in high school, I performed a school festival with my classmates. 

For the performance, we praticed every day after school.
>> Prior the performance, we practices every day after school. 

We finished our performance sucessfully.
>>We finished our performance successfully.

Acutally, I have an introverted personality, so I feed uncomfortable to perform in fornt of many pepple.
>> Actually, I have an introverted personality so I feed uncomfortable when I perform in front of many people. 

That's why I was trying to overcome it. 
>> CORRECT

And then it was a good experience for me this event.
>> This event was a good experience for me. 
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