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Do you think you make a good first impression?

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I think I have?(make?) not bad first impression,
I believe appearance still is the best influence out of deciding first impression.
I have heard that others say my facial features?(appearance?outlook?) looks earnest and obedient although I'm not really like that..
However, every time I go into interviews for job, I try my best to wear suitably, say properly and firmly with confidence.
Maybe it is not enough because I used to get nervous even if I don't want to, but I want to believe I gave them good impression though~
I just want to be taller than I am now and I think it could help me to improve my first impression~

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Greetings Anna!

First of all, I hope that your wish to become taller comes true. Moreover, I strongly agree that your facial features send the impression of diligence, obedience, and subtlety. But there is nothing to worry about as first impressions more often than not do not last very long. Those that we leave as imprints in other people's minds are the things we constantly do or a grave mistake we have made. Thus, we can work on how we want to be remembered. 

Very good composition. Stay inspired and see you on the next essay!

-T. Donna =)

I think I have?(make?) not bad first impression,
>>Correct!
Or: I think I may have made a not so bad first impression. 

I believe appearance still is the best influence out of deciding first impression.
>> I believe appearance is still is the best influence out of deciding the first impression.

I have heard that others say my facial features?(appearance?outlook?) looks earnest and obedient although I'm not really like that..
>> I have heard that others say my facial features?(appearance?outlook?) look earnest and obedient although I'm not really like that..

However, every time I go into interviews for job, I try my best to wear suitably, say properly and firmly with confidence.
>> However, every time I go into interviews for job, I try my best to wear clothes suitably, say my words properly and firmly with confidence.

Maybe it is not enough because I used to get nervous even if I don't want to, but I want to believe I gave them good impression though~
>>  Correct!

I just want to be taller than I am now and I think it could help me to improve my first impression~
>> Correct!
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