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Q) Why is it important to train our dogs at an early age?

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As educating child of human, it is important to train dogs at an early age because it is easier to make them a habit. It is difficult to change when bad behavior has become a habit already. Thus in korea there is a old saying, "The habit of three years old lasts to eighty."

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Good day, Laura!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, you really did great. :) Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Q) Why is it important to train our dogs at an early age?

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As educating child of human, it is important to train dogs at an early age because it is easier to make them a habit. 
>> Like educating a child, it is important to train dogs at an early age because it is easier for them to make a habit. 

It is difficult to change when bad behavior has become a habit already. 
>> CORRECT!

Thus in korea there is a old saying, "The habit of three years old lasts to eighty."
>> Thus in Korea there is an old saying, "The habit of three years old lasts to eighty."

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